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these things come in threes

I should have realized it when I first saw the man peeing on the corner between my house and the park.  I had bought a pretty upscale apartment in New York.  Guys didn’t just go around peeing on the wall surrounding central park.  I mean, so not cool.  And his thing was out in the open for everyone to see.  I just closed my window curtain and sighed.  Things were gonna be awkward for me that day, but I didn’t think it would be a terrible day.

I was stepping around the morning rush of businessmen and women trying to get to their jobs on time in the subway car that morning when I heard an announcement over the speakers.  The police were looking for a man with alleged illegal firearms on his person.  The description sounded just like the odd man standing next to me holding onto the pole near the door.  He was in a tan trench coat with a rather bumpy looking spot on his chest.  I thought to myself: that could be a firearm.  So I decided to start screaming my head off because I for one didn’t want to die on a subway car miles below the city.  We were still moving though the dark of the tunnels, but I tried to claw my way past people to get to the other side of the car, away from the criminal in the tan trench coat.  I tripped over a woman in high heels in such a way that we both fell over, me lying on top of her.  Everyone glared down at me, and one man said, “If you were listening closely, you would have heard that the description was for a man in a black trench coat and a mole on his chin.”  Angrily huffing, he turned away, and so did the other passengers.

Terribly embarrassed, I apologized profusely to the woman after managing to get up.  The man I had screamed about was glaring out the window, his cheeks tinted red with a little furrow between his brows.  I must have embarrassed him a great deal.  To be accused of a crime one had not committed!  And I hadn’t even done that!  I’d just screamed.  I was so embarrassed that I got off the subway when it wasn’t my stop and waited for another one.

When I finally stepped into the light of day, I was almost late to work, so I was rushing toward my office building in a tight gray pencil skirt that I knew I shouldn’t have worn, especially after the fiasco on the subway train.

Of course, as soon as I slipped into the revolving doors which were the only way in the building through the front at this time of day, so everyone was squeezing in as fast as they can, I got my skirt stuck on something.  Being squished between two people in our little glass compartment, I wasn’t able to turn and see how to fix it, but with a tug I was able to start the doors turning again without making two commotions in one morning.  That tug was a bad idea, however, as I learned later.  I walked through the entire first floor to the elevators, and sat down at my desk on the 5th floor, no one telling me in the elevator, in the hallway, or anywhere that they could see everything with the huge new slit in the back of my skirt.  I’m hoping no one noticed, but it seems implausible that the men who never noticed me were just finally noticing me today.  I think there was a reason I didn’t want to get out of bed this morning.

secret revised

The music was loud.  She liked it like that.  Dancing on the carpet in one of her freakum dresses, Mary can be in her own world when her bedroom door is locked.  Loudly singing the lyrics to ‘Bad Romance’ she does a barefoot twirl, coming to a rest with a thud on the floor. Tucking her head into her neck for a second, she freezes. Opening her eyes she inches over to the speakers and turns it off.

In front of the mirror she pushes out her lips, brings her face close to the mirror and flattens her forehead, making a sexy face.  Reaching down, without taking her eyes off the mirror, she grabs the lipstick stick that is in an easy to reach pile.  It’s her favorite, the darkish red one.  Her sexy face changes into a frown, remembering. It’s not the bright red for dress up time; it’s a more serious day.

She might be in trouble.  If mom noticed, she was screwed.  She had hidden it pretty well though, and once dad left the room, she could go fix it.  Mom was asleep on the bed, but if she was careful…

Okay, here goes.  Tiptoeing on the carpet, she opens the door with a click.  A dog woofs once, and they wag their tails, but they don’t get up because they’re ready for bedtime.  Startled, she closes the door.  She will get a snack first, wait for them to settle down more, and then she’ll fix it.  Dad was still at work, and both her siblings were in their respective rooms.

Walking back up stairs with a cheese stick, Mary walks casually into her parent’s room, humming the pink panther theme song and not noticing that her mom was reading a book.  As she started to walk past her mom, she looked up from her reading.

“Mary?  What are you doing?” she asked.

She screams bloody murder.

“Ah!  Mary!  What the hell?”

“Oh my god, mom, you scared me so bad!   Sorry!”

“Ah!  Jeez, Mary.   I’m really tired.  What do you need?”

“Oh, um.  I just wanted to get some cough drops.  My throat kind of hurts.”  Coughs.

“I thought you were over your cold already.”

“Oh, well, I just…I mean…Agh!  Nevermind!”

“Wait!  Mary!  Come back here!”

“What?!  Just leave me alone!  I’m going back to my room.”

“Honey, really.  I’m awake now, so it’s okay.  Want me to make you some tea?”

Mary perks up.

“You will?  Really?  Can you?  That’d be awesome!”

“Yeah, of course, honey.  Just give me a minute.”

Moving to get up from the bed, she says, “Uh oh, I gotta pee. Hang on a minute, Mary.”

Oh no!  She was gonna see it!

“Wait, mom!”

“What?”

“Don’t—don’t go in there!”

“Why?”

“Umm…”

“Yes?”

“Nothing.”  Mary smiled brightly, maybe her mom wouldn’t notice.

“Uh, okay.  Hang on, I’ll be out in a sec!” Her mom remarked, stepping over the dog and shifting quickly towards the bathroom.

Mary moves around to her father’s side of the bed.  Before jumping onto the mattress, she leans down to pat the other dog on the head, waking him up.  Crossing her arms under her chin, she huffs, then smiles, and starts to hum a song from the Sound of Music.

Hearing the tap run, Mary rolls onto her back, spreading her arms wide.  Staring up at the ceiling, she ignores the sounds of her mother moving things around in the bathroom and continues to hum distractedly.

The sound of a door clicking open causes her to look at her mom upside down and laugh.

 “You look funny upside down mom,” she says, giggling.

“Hey Mary,” her mother says, coming close to the edge of the bed Mary’s head is lolling off of.

“Yeah, mom?”

“Imuna kill you!” she says playfully, taking a last step toward the bed before she starts roughly tickling Mary, grinning evilly.  After Mary rolls around for a while, screaming with laughter, her eyes scrunched up in tickle pain, a voice from across the hall screams, “SHUT UP!  I’m trying to sleep!”

Both stop their actions.  They glance toward the door then look at each other and grin, trying to stop their giggles.  Laying on the bed next to Mary, her mom smiles.

“So, why did you use my make up without my permission?”

“It was only your mascara!  And I put it back!”

“Uh-huh.  And you left smudges all over my counter, with balled up tissues all over the place!  There was even one in the sink, all wet and gross.  I had to clean it up.  Why would you make such a mess, you munchkin?  Ahrg!”  She moved to grab Mary’s foot laying near her hip, but Mary squeals and moves it away too fast, her breathing still a little harsh.

“So?”

“I dunno.”

“I dunno.” Her mom copies her, saying the words in a stupid voice.

Mary laughs.

“Sorry,” she says, smiling sheepishly.

“Mm-hm,” her mom hums.  “You sound so sincere.”

“Sorry.”  Mary says again, undulating until her legs are off the bed.  She kneels on the ground, peering up at her mom with a pouty lip.

“What?  You think I’m gonna make you tea after that?  Go make it yourself, ya bucket head.”

Mary blows a raspberry at her mom.  “Fine!” She says, laughing.  Standing up she walks to the door and opens it, stopping with her face in the crack.  “Want some?”

“Yeah.  Chamomile, please.  Thanks, honey.”

“Ok. Be right back.” Mary says as she closes the door behind her.  A meow comes from beside her right foot.  Smiling, Mary starts bouncing down the stairs, the cat right behind, her tiny bell mingling with the sound of Mary’s loud singing of Under the Sea.

curtain revised

I’m hiding in a window curtain in my family’s library.  Why? Because my new friends wanted to play a game of hide and seek.  Jon, the seeker, has found almost everyone else but me.  Now they’re all running around like idiots in this huge house.  I’m just waiting for the “Ollieollieostenfree!”.  I hear them in the dining room two doors down.

            There’s Lauren’s signature giggle.  Someone says, “Aniiittaa, we’re gonna find youuu!” in a creepy voice.  Stephanie’s never been to my house before, and there she goes again, squealing in ‘fear’ and grabbing for Josh’s arm, mashing her boobs on him.  She has the biggest boobs in all of 7th grade.  She’s the one who said haunted houses are the best for hide and go seek.  She’s trying to take advantage of all the dark places in my house to do weird things with her boyfriend.  I know because they were in here.

The curtain I’m hiding behind is dusty.  Every time I move I feel like I need to sneeze.  I rearranged my legs and a nasty, long strand of dust got puffed up, and it’s going toward my nose.  Ew, I was going to sniff it in!  I go crazy, trying to push it away from me, but I accidentally hit the curtain with a loud sound.

Uh oh.  I freeze and listen.  There is no sound coming down the hallway.  They must have left the dining room while I wasn’t paying attention.  I lean forward and push my ear against the dark blue curtain.  I don’t hear any footsteps or whispers.  Nothing.  I don’t even hear any creaks from this old house.  They must have glanced in the library and gone, just Stephanie and Josh had earlier.  I expected more of Max.

I remember the first time I met him.  It was my first day in my new school and I didn’t have anyone to sit with for lunch.  The girl that had been showing me around to my classes deserted me halfway through the cafeteria line.  She must have gone to one of the popular tables.  Standing by the ketchup dispenser I looked around the room. I decided I’d just choose an empty table and figure out my schedule for the rest of the day in case she wasn’t coming back to help me.  I saw a what I thought was an empty table next to a table full of people I recognized from band class.  Except, when I sat down, I realized there was a person sitting across from me.  I learned later that Max had been people watching, one of his favorite things to do.  He said it gave him ideas for his paintings.  I sat across from him and said hi.  He didn’t answer, so I looked down.  He was staring at me.  I thought he looked emo.  I tried to ignore him and got out my schedule.

“Why did you sit in that chair, new girl?” he asked me.

“Um, hi.  I’m Anita.  And you are?” I asked.

He harrumphed.  “Max.  Why’d you sit there?”

“I just did.  Why?  Were you saving it?  I can move.”  I went to get up.

“No, no.  Its fine, it’s just that you’ve blocked my view of the room.”

“Oh, sorry.  Should I switch to this seat here?”

“No.  It’s fine.  I don’t mind looking at you instead.”  I blushed, and he continued like hadn’t noticed.  “So, Anita.  Where did you come from before you came here?”

“I’m from Chicago.  We moved because my mom got transferred here for work.”

“Hmm.”

We sat in silence for a minute.  He stard at me, and I pretended to read my schedule.  I was highly aware of his eyes on my face.

“Can I draw you?”

That was my introduction to Max.  He was the weirdo of the grade, and most people avoided him.  I liked his oddness, though.  He was different, like me.  We were mature, which made people not like us.  Plus he was great at drawing.  I found out that he sat with the band kids when he wasn’t people watching.  He introduced me to Lauren, Josh, Jon, and Heather, and I joined their group.

He’s in my house!  He probably searched my bedroom!  I’m so glad I cleaned!  I didn’t expect to play hide and seek, but now if he goes in my room they won’t see a bra flung over a chair or anything.

I was sitting against the wall, and I hear the sound of footsteps.  Coming around the corner of the door, I hear them stop.  The person was alone.  They were together before.  Had they split up to try and find me faster?  Slowly the person walked the other side of the room.  No clicking meant it wasn’t Stephanie’s heels.  Wasn’t Josh either since he’d be with her.  Lauren had taken her shoes off when she came in the house.  The only person left with shoes was Max.  I hear him walk through the book shelves, and then I can’t hear him for a while.  Then I hear a whoosh, whoosh.  He’s swishing back the curtains!  I close my eyes and hold my breath.  Maybe he won’t find me!  But I want him to.  I’m the curtain near the door.  The last one.  I feel the curtain move and I open my eyes, watering a little from the dust.  There’s Max.  Standing there grinning, holding the curtain over his head.

“Hey, you guys!  I found her!” he yells, turning his head toward the hallway.  Still keeping his eyes on me, his smile widens.  Holding out his hand, he helps me up.  We laugh.

“You found me,” I say.

100 hours

I just received my certificate and pin for my 100 hour mark volunteering at Spotsylvania Regional Medical center! :)

Also, here are the links to the youtube videos of my Medical Forum! :)

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9ikAZePo6eo

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5EKg4sf10ew

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qARffqdg45M

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=X1AXhxBLBJY

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Se8ok5E6E1g

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=k75r3nwnVDI

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EXqP1pyjSv4

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_5KyxxK9-Pw

road less traveled

It’s not the street I usually go down. But for some reason, that day I turned down a different road.

We tended to talk about her day at school and soccer, and she’d do most of the talking.  I’d ask a question, like “What was it you were trying to tell me on your way to math?” and she’d make a little surprised sound, remembering something funny that happened she wanted to share. 

Today it was quiet in the car.  She sat next to me on the passenger side and stared ahead, out of it.  I wondered what she was thinking about.  Was this a good time to bring it up?

I would talk about something else first.  The project she was working on?  God, all I ever ask about is school.  But…if I ask what her favorite color is or something she’d wonder why I’m asking now.  She’ll have expected me to have noticed already or something, but we didn’t really start hanging out until after our groups of friends started hanging out together.

“Hey.”

“Mmm?”

“What’s your favorite color?”

She laughed at me.  “Purple.  What’s yours?”

“Orange.”

“Ah.”

Ugh, that didn’t last long.  Why did it have to be so awkward?  I should just blurt it out, but then the ride to her house will just be even more awkward.

We were almost there now, though.  I’ll ask just as we’re turning into the driveway, then.

I’ll just take one of my palms off the wheel and act calm.  I try to relax, unstraightening my back, molding it into the seat leather seat back.

Here we are.

“Hey.”

“Yeah?”

“Do you wanna go to prom with me?”
She squealed and leaned over, giving me a hug.

“Yes!”

3 minute story

Jessica had been with Ethan for 7 months now, the longest she had ever gone out with a boy for an extended period of time with no break-ups.  It was an interesting experience with him being such a stand up guy, since she wasn’t called a slut anymore because of him.  It was useful having him around since he protected her short stature from the crush of bodies that was high school hallways, but most importantly he took care of her emotionally.

Before him, she didn’t know that she needed someone to listen to her talk about feelings, but opening the Pandora box that was all of Jessica’s secrets had proved beneficial.  She was happier, and being with Ethan was helping her learn more about herself and people.  They were in a relationship now where all of his friends became her friends, and vice versa for him with her one best friend.

It was a month to prom and Ethan had already asked her, just randomly asked her with a flower.  Not one of the fancy jobs, but good enough.  They knew each other so well from all the time they spent together in newspaper club after school as well as lunch, it didn’t matter that they didn’t share any classes.  Still, she wondered why they weren’t as lovey as the other high school couples acted.  It’s not like she wanted to be making out against the lockers in front of everyone, but showing a little affection was fine, since they never got to meet outside of school with their busy schedules.

They were in the lunchroom now, B-block days lunch was really early, 10 am, and no one was really awake yet.  Ethan was sitting next to her, and his friend Milo was across from then.  At the moment, Milo was looking into his soup like he was about to fall asleep.  Acting like she was just rearranging her skirt, Jessica plopped herself just a little closer to Ethan, closing the 2 inch wide gap that was between them so their thighs brushed.

“Hey Ethan, how did that AP Biology homework that you were scared about go?” she asked after he had swallowed a bite of his ziti.  She put her hands on the bench behind her and leaned her body forward to look into his face from the side.  He was smiling a little and reading a folded section of the newspaper!  The newspaper!  No wonder he had been so quiet.  He hadn’t heard her.

“Ethan?”

He didn’t respond.  Milo was still staring at his soup.  Jessica got an idea.  She took her pointer and middle finger and walked them around his shoulders.

“Eeethaaan.” She crooned, drawing out his name.

“Hang on a sec, Jess.  Lemme finish this, it’s about student journalists.”

He was ignoring her now.  She continued walking her fingers over his back, then across his head.  He flipped the page.

Huffing, Jessica crossed her arms and leaned on him, putting her head on his shoulder.  Nothing she did affected him now; he was all work and no play, Mr. 4.0.  Glancing over at Milo, Jessica saw that he was slowly sipping at his now cold soup, looking at her questioningly.

“What?”

“Nothin’.  Why you bothering him?” said Milo, in a bad mood for some reason, the usual for Milo.

Ethan did this every Monday since he has no time to read the Sunday edition otherwise.  Jessica knew that, but it seemed that lately he didn’t have any time for her whatsoever.

“Yeah, I know.  Sorry, Ethan.”  Sitting up straight, she scooched away a bit and turned to Milo.  “So, why do you have those lovely bags under your eyes on this fine morning?”  Jessica asked Milo with a chuckle.  “Play halo late again?”

“No.  For your information, I do do my homework sometimes.  If I didn’t, I wouldn’t be able to stay on the team.”

Ugh, baseball made Jessica want to pull her hair out.  They were both on the team and Ethan was a great pitcher, so they’d never let him skip out on anything.  Practice always lasted way later than it should have, and Jessica could only watch, and then she’d have to leave for her job at the smoothie joint, yet another hindrance to their meetings outside of school.

It had been Ethan’s texts about baseball practice that had made everything so convoluted.  If he hadn’t written like he was angry as all get out, she probably wouldn’t have misunderstood, but his temper had always frightened her a little.  His texts never had any exclamation points or smileys…not that she expected them, but it made it hard to understand what he meant to say, especially when he misspelled things.  He wanted to be a journalist so badly, and she didn’t think her prowess as an editor daunted him, but after she confronted him about his texts and phone call where he hung up on her, he let out all his repressed anger that he’d been hiding from her.

She sort of expected it.  They weren’t matched too well.  He was extremely good at math and science, and had a different mindset than she.  Her best friend Julia claimed she had seen this, but she didn’t want to ruin things when Jessica had seemed so happy, but how would Julia know?  She hung out with Milo now, and Jessica had had to hear third hand from Ethan that Milo told him the two were going out.

So, as of now Jessica didn’t have a prom date.  That wasn’t a big problem because as soon as Ethan had called them off ‘for now’, people had already started whispering about her again.  Without Ethan to protect her, Jessica was going to dissolve back into the wall, writing winning newspaper articles and sharing pleasantries with Milo, pretending that things weren’t so awkward, pretending that she was still happy.  It would all work out, but for now, she had to get over the break-up hump, then, she’d look back and see that it was just another high school romance.  No big deal, just lasted a little longer than the norm.  Everything would go back to normal.

curtain

I’m hiding in the window curtain of my family’s library.  Why, you ask? Because my new, immature friends wanted to play a game of hide and seek.  At this point, Jim, who started off this round as the seeker, has found almost everyone else but me.  Now they’re all running around like idiots in this huge house.  They’re never gonna find me, and I’m just waiting for the “Ollieollieostenfree!”.  I can hear them in the dining room two doors down the long hall.  Their voices echo on the high ceiling, bouncing off the stone gargoyles and vaulted windows.

            I hear giggling and Lauren yells out, “Aniiittaa, we’re gonna find youuu!” in a creepy voice.  Stephanie’s never been to my house before, and there she goes again, squealing in ‘fear’ and grabbing for Josh’s arm, mashing her boobs on him.  She has the biggest boobs in all of 7th grade.  She’s the one who suggested it, saying haunted houses are the best for hide and go seek.  She’s trying to take advantage of all the dark places in my house to do weird things with her boyfriend.  I know because they were in here, thinking no one would be brave enough to hide in the cobwebby library with its dark recesses.  Well, the new girl on the block isn’t a stupid girl like Stephanie.  I know our new house like the palm of my hand: explored everywhere and I’ve got the best hiding place there is.

However, the curtain I’m hiding behind is dank and dusty.  I get the urge to sneeze every time I move because it picks up dust.  In the light from the lamp on the desk across the room and the pale sunshine that comes and goes through the high window from the clouds on this overcast day, I can see the dust motes floating.  I have to rearrange my legs because my right foot’s asleep, and when I do a long strand is puffed up, up, up and I watch the nasty thing come closer and closer and closer to my nose.  Agh, I was going to sniff it in!  Pushing my hand out I get it away from me, but in doing so I hit the curtain with a rather loud whap.

Uh oh.  I freeze and listen.  There is no sound coming down the hall.  They must have left the dining room while I wasn’t paying attention.  I should have been listening for their movements.  Straining, I lean forward a bit, pushing my ear against the velvety feel of the dark blue curtain, holding all my weight on my hands.  I don’t hear any footsteps or whispers.  Nothing.  I don’t even hear any creaks from this old house.  They must have glanced in the library and gone, just Stephanie and Josh had earlier.  I expected more of Max.  He thought kind of like I did.

I remember the first time I met Max.  It was my first day in my new school and I didn’t have anyone to sit with for lunch.  The girl that had been showing me around to my classes deserted me halfway through the cafeteria line.  I didn’t even see the table she ran to with her friends, although I figured it was one of the louder ones filled with long-haired laughing girls and some of the handsomer boys.  Standing by the ketchup dispenser I looked around the room.  I’ll just choose one of the emptier tables and figure out my schedule for the rest of the day in case she wasn’t coming back to help me.  Spying what I thought was an empty table next to a table half full of kids I recognized from band class, I headed toward it.  I realized there was one person occupying a chair in a position to see the entire room.  I learned later that Max had been people watching, one of his favorite things to do, since it gave him ideas for his paintings.  I sat across from him and said hi, then looked down since he didn’t respond.  Staring stonily at me, I thought he looked kind of emo, but his hair was a light brown and cut short.  Busying myself with my schedule, I ignored him looking at me and got out my schedule.

“Why did you choose to sit in that chair, new girl?” he asked me.

“Ah, hello.  I’m Anita.  And you are?” I asked sweetly.

He harrumphed.  “Max.  Why’d you sit there?”

“I just did.  Why?  Were you saving it?  I can move.”  I went to get up.

“No, no.  It’s fine, it’s just that you’ve blocked my view of the room.”

“Ah, sorry.  Should I switch to this seat here?”

“No.  It’s fine.  I don’t mind looking at you instead.”  I blushed, and he continued like hadn’t noticed my embarrassment.  “So, Anita.  Where did you come from before you came here?”

“I’m from Chicago.  We moved here because my mom got transferred here for work.”

“Hmm.”

We sat in silence for a minute, him staring at me, and me looking at my schedule, pretending to read while really just feeling the hairs on the back of my neck raise, highly aware of his eyes on my face.

“Can I draw you?”

That was my introduction to Max.  His abruptness turned out to be a lack of a filter over his mouth, although I appreciated the calm found when he drew things.  Most of the time he’d sit with the other band kids, Stephanie, Lauren, Josh, Heather, and the rest, so he introduced me, and I got to join their group.

This is the first time he’s been to my house.  I’m glad I tidied up my room.  I didn’t expect this game, but now if they look around at least he won’t see a bra flung over a chair or anything.

I was sitting against the cool stone of the wall, listening for voices, and the sound of footsteps echoed to me.  Coming around the corner of the door, I heard them stop.  The person was alone.  They were together before.  Had they split up to try and find me faster?  Slowly the person walked the other side of the room.  No clicking meant it wasn’t Stephanie’s heels.  Wasn’t Josh either since he’d be with her.  Lauren had taken her shoes off when she came in the house.  The only person left with shoes was Max.  His confident steps went through the shelves of books, winding back and forth through the four rows until he had checked the two corners at the back of the room.  Stepping along the wall of the side I was on, I hear him swishing back curtains one at a time with a whoosh, whoosh.  Squeezing my eyes shut and holding my breath, I mush myself into a corner.  It’s possible he won’t be checking well enough and the large folds of the curtains will still hide me from view when he whips my curtain out of the way.  No luck.  I’m the curtain near the door.  The last one.  I feel the cloth lifted off of me and I open my eyes, watering a little from all the dust.  There’s Max.  Standing there grinning, holding the curtain over his head in victory.

“Hey, you guys!  I found her!” he yells, turning his head toward the hallway.  Still keeping his eyes on me, his smile widens.  Holding out his hand, he helps me up, laughing.

“You found me,” I say.

curtain beginnings

Write a plot outline and 1 dramatic beginning that begins with a character peering out from behind a curtain. (half page-page long)

Plot outline:

-exposition: girl hiding in curtain, playing hide and seek

-rising action: two people searching for her, whoever finds her first wins the contest

-climax: one person gives up searching, the girl gets scared by thunderstorm and changes hiding spots

-falling action: person searching thinks they know where she is, since they know her well

-resolution: the searcher finds her under the bed and wins the prize (twist: of a kiss? Turns out it’s a dog…?)

-Middle schoolers or younger

-Don’t know that they’re in love with her-smell nice or likes pigtails or something-naïve

-giant hunt: crazy person-hour headstart- the most dangerous game-ray bradbury

-fight to death

-One murderer-two?  Triangle-different relationships

-Perspective story-same story told three times

-hiding v. waiting- game (certain age)

-brothers and sisters-youth

-central conflict: triangle? Found by one? Which one? Do we like him? Her reaction?

Dramatic lead:

No one was going to find her.  She was going to stay here until someone found her, though, because Max had asked her to.  It didn’t mean she had to be grateful for the chance to play this game.  It was fun at first, but it was getting stuffy, and the challenge of keeping her feet unseen was becoming a strain on her thigh muscles instead of the self-test it began as.  Pushing her hand through the yellow tassels, frayed and dirtied from fingers running through them, Anita pulled aside the window drape.  No one was in the room, of course.  She would have heard them coming, as they both talked to themselves.  She could take a break now, since she hadn’t heard footsteps for a while.  Sitting down, Anita’s muscles sighed in relief as the tension lifted from them, only to emerge on her lower back as it spasmed.

Needs to be more direct, now it is a leisurely/ambiguous (not being clear about what’s going on) lead, not dramatic ↑

-For dramatic lead: opening curtain right away (middle of an action)-thoughts are secondary (see her speaking-monologue out loud, then things happen)-have them walking in the room (close by)

Narrator lead:

I’m hiding in the window curtain of my family’s library.  Why, you ask? Because my immature friends wanted to play a game of hide and seek.  At this point, Jim, who started off this round as the seeker, has found almost everyone else but me.  Now they’re all running around like idiots in this huge house.  They’re never gonna find me, and I’m just waiting for the “Ollieollieostenfree!”.  I can hear them in the hallway outside, their voices echoing on the high ceiling, bouncing off the stone gargoyles.  I hear giggling and Lauren yells out, “Aniiittaa, we’re gonna find youuu!” in a creepy voice.  Stephanie’s never been to my house before, and there she goes again, squealing in ‘fear’ and grabbing for Josh’s arm, mashing her boobs on him.  She has the biggest boobs in all of 7th grade.  She’s the one who suggested it, saying haunted houses are the best for hide and go seek.  She’s trying to take advantage of all the dark places in my house to do weird things with her boyfriend.  I know because they were in here, thinking no one would be brave enough to hide in the cobwebby library with its dark recesses.  Well, the new girl on the block isn’t a stupid girl like Stephanie.  I know our new house like the palm of my hand: explored everywhere, and I’ve got the best hiding place there is.

Begin at the ending lead:

Yep.  This is it.  Or pretty close to it, anyways.  The search for Anita is almost over.  For sure this time.  No surprises.  No more twists.  It’s done.  I promise.  I guess it’s not a big surprise to see that I lost.  Not that my hiding was always this obvious, it’s just that if I was better at hide and go seek, none of this ever would have happened, would it?  Still, a very big question still weighs on me.  What’s my next step supposed to be?  What is going to happen now that the game is about to end?  It’s not the same as every other game.  Depending on whose confident footsteps those are approaching my spot, my next month of high school life will be either hell or heaven.  What’s it gonna be, boys?

Misleading lead:

“I feel bad that I’m leaving you like this,” Lauren said.  Her eyes were puffy and red.  They’d been that way ever since we got separated from the boys.  “You have to do what you have to do,” I said, giving her a grin in the dark of the deserted library.  I could tell even in this light the guilt, shame, and grief passing through Lauren’s head while she looked at me, trying to convince herself that she should stay, even when she knew she was going to go in the end.  “I’ll be fine,” I told her.  I can’t seem to stop whispering reassurances to her even though if she leaves me I’ll be scared enough to pee my pants.

character

The music was loud.  She liked it like that.  Dancing on the carpet in one of her freakum dresses, Mary can be in her own world when her bedroom door is locked.  Loudly singing the lyrics to ‘Bad Romance’ she does a barefoot twirl, coming to a rest with a thud on the floor. Tucking her head into her neck for a second, she freezes. Opening her eyes she inches over to the speakers and turns it off.

In front of the mirror she pushes out her lips, brings her face close to the mirror and flattens her forehead, making a sexy face.  Reaching down, without taking her eyes off the mirror, she grabs the lipstick stick that is in an easy to reach pile.  It’s her favorite, the darkish red one.  It’s not the bright red for dress up time; it’s a more serious day.

She might be in trouble.  If mom noticed, she was screwed.  She had hidden it pretty well though, and once dad left the room, she could go fix it.  Mom was asleep on the bed, but if she was careful…

Okay, here goes.  Tiptoeing on the carpet, she opens the door with a click.  A dog woofs once, and they wag their tails, but they don’t get up because they’re ready for bedtime.  Startled, she closes the door.  She will get a snack first, wait for them to settle down more, and then she’ll fix it.  Dad was still at work, and both her siblings were in their respective rooms.

Walking back up stairs with a cheese stick, Mary walks casually into her parent’s room, humming the pink panther theme song and not noticing that her mom was reading a book.  As she started to walk past her mom, she looked up from her reading.

“Mary?  What are you doing?” she asked.

She screams bloody murder.

“Ah!  Mary!  What the hell?”

“Oh my god, mom, you scared me so bad!   Sorry!”

“Ah!  Jeez, Mary.   I’m really tired.  What do you need?”

“Oh, um.  I just wanted to get some cough drops.  My throat kind of hurts.”  Coughs.

“I thought you were over your cold already.”

“Oh, well, I just…I mean…Agh!  Nevermind!”

“Wait!  Mary!  Come back here!”

“What?!  Just leave me alone!  I’m going back to my room.”

“Honey, really.  I’m awake now, so it’s okay.  Want me to make you some tea?”

Mary perks up.

“You will?  Really?  Can you?  That’d be awesome!”

“Yeah, of course, honey.  Just give me a minute.”

Moving to get up from the bed, she says, “Uh oh, I gotta pee. Hang on a minute, Mary.”

Oh no!  She was gonna see it!

“Wait, mom!”

“What?”

“Don’t—don’t go in there!”

“Why?”

“Umm…the dog peed in there.”

“What?  How do you know that?”

Color haiku

Crisp, bright green plant stalk

Respectful, off to the side

Lone flagpole stands tall